essay question, "why i would be an asset to the medical

[Raptor]

for the above mentioned topic, would i be able to start off by describing the passing away of a loved one due to cystic fibrosis and how it has opened my eyes and inspired me in becoming a doctor. Later on, i would describe the volunteer/things i have done which incorporate my personality and work ethic in being an asset to medical school...just wanted opinions on how that sounds?

thanks a bunch

[jaywalk81]

to tell you the truth that sounds like a very normal and stereotypical essay. i am not saying that it is bad, but you want to aim for your essay to stand out from the others. the admit commitee will read thousands of essays and you want yours to stick in their mind and stand out from the rest. i know it sounds a lot harder than it is and by all means it is a very difficult to do..i spent almost 6 months writing and revising mine...
good luck.